Caught draft 1 from Synflame
Our first draft:
- I agree that the moral premise doesn't reflect what happens in the script, the script was rushed in order to just to write and get something down - needs to be changed to fit the script more
- I agree that Georgie and I are good at writing domestic issues in our scripts, as previously seen in Caught in the Act - we need to alter the script to fit to what we are good at and can do well
- I agree that the dialogue is very 'on the nose', it needs to be more subtextual in order to fit with the age range of the characters in the script and also to make it more interesting for the audience - again, we need to develop the script to accommodate subtext - stick to what we know and are good at
- I agree that the ending wasn't what Dawn's character would've done - needs to change, she shouldn't 'let go'
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